Michael Jackson

"The progressive alteration of Michael Jackson's nose, resulting from several reported rhinoplasties, became a widely discussed and controversial element of his evolving image. Photographic evidence reveals the dramatic extent of these changes, culminating in a highly refined, and arguably over-stylized, nasal appearance. Ultimately, numerous surgical interventions, including rhinoplasty, contributed to a distinct, almost otherworldly look in his later years, starkly contrasting with his earlier features."
(((sigh)))
The German who edited Hitler's speeches was the world’s first grammar Nazi.
Grammar nazis think the world should speak the way you do. You are, almost universally, narcissists and jingoists.
Also, this is not a legal document, scientific paper, or some other crucial piece of writing: who cares about their grammar? Expecting 'perfect grammar' (which doesn't exist) in a situation such as this is like wearing a tux to go grocery shopping. Get real; get appropriate; you are out of touch.
Besides, other than what looks to be a typo (ie and), it's pretty well written, in conventional terms.