Janice Dickinson

"Janice Dickinson, the 66-year-old often cited as the world's first supermodel, has openly discussed her extensive use of cosmetic procedures in an attempt to prevent aging. These interventions, including a facelift, breast surgery, tummy tuck, liposuction, and Botox, have resulted in a markedly different appearance compared to her early modeling days."
(((sigh)))
The German who edited Hitler's speeches was the world’s first grammar Nazi.
Grammar nazis think the world should speak the way you do. You are, almost universally, narcissists and jingoists.
Also, this is not a legal document, scientific paper, or some other crucial piece of writing: who cares about their grammar? Expecting 'perfect grammar' (which doesn't exist) in a situation such as this is like wearing a tux to go grocery shopping. Get real; get appropriate; you are out of touch.
Besides, other than what looks to be a typo (ie and), it's pretty well written, in conventional terms.